标签：托福 could 28 their parents 写作 they children more
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亮点: has been acknowledged 被认为
From my perspective 在我看来
modern parents are more related to 更加被加入
emphasis z重视
to some extent 可以代替somehow
That could suggest 可以和imply互相代替着用
arrangements/apportionment分配、规划
percieve 察觉
in terms of代替on
be regarded as = be
The involvement of parents in their children’s education has been acknowledged to include not only the exact knowledge and values they would tell their children but also the attention they would pay to their children’s educational process as well as the role they would play during the decision-making process. From my perspective, modern parents are more related to their children’s educational aspects than parents are in the past.
It could not be denied that parents in the modern society would bear much more responsibilities and burdens as well than those in the past such as the financial pressure to support the family, due to the increasing desire of individuals and the economic reality in the present society. That means modern parents would spend plenty of time on earning money and have less time to be with their children or to actually teach them. However, the real situation regarding the children education is that parents in the present are more likely to emphasize the education of their children in various respects such as arranging the detailed study plan for their children.
Moreover, the emphasis children would receive on their education from the parents has been increased significantly in the contemporary society, because of the fact that individuals now have generally believed in the essential influence of the education on people especially the younger generation. That significance could be realized by the modern parents during their working and social experiences, and it to a great extent could be comprehended due to the reality that the well-educated person has been demanded in relatively every area of the current society. Therefore, in order to help their children to become successful and qualified, parents in the present have been inclined to check or help with their school projects, to have them acquire multiple skills, and to expect them to receive the best education at a higher level, which would not be the focus of the parents in the past who even did not care about the educational situation of their children and merely held the expectation that the children could help to support the family in terms of the finance as soon as possible.
Furthermore, it has been proposed that current parents have been more active during the process of making decisions related to their children’s educational choices than the past. That could suggest that to some extent they would like to exert an influence on the children and their educational affairs rather than be willing to let their children to have the independent decision-making process as they did in the past, which might be due to the possibility that the present parents might place more emphasis on their children’s education and not want them to make any mistakes. However, this situation could probably be interpreted that the modern parents could be considered to be the better educated people themselves and could assist their children to choose wisely and appropriately by offering the relevant information and reasonable advice in the course of educational matters such as how to plan their time arrangements, what major they would study in, and whether they should have a gap year before entering the university.
In conclusion, although modern parents might have less time with their children than those in the past during their educational period, they definitely could be regarded as more active in the participation in their children’s educational activities in terms of the attention they might pay and the positive effort they might provide to help their children to make educational decisions due to the fact that they perceive the importance.
亮点: has been acknowledged 被认为
From my perspective 在我看来
modern parents are more related to 更加被加入
emphasis z重视
to some extent 可以代替somehow
That could suggest 可以和imply互相代替着用
arrangements/apportionment分配、规划
percieve 察觉
in terms of代替on
be regarded as = be
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Since the dawn of this century, it is an increasingly widespread discussion about the issue that if parents spend more and more efforts in their children’s study. Some people belive that in modern life, under the pressure form a varity of sources, parents have been acknowledged to put less time devoting in the study of their children. However, this statement suffers from both logical and factual fallocies. As far as the technological developmet, the growth of conciousness on education as well as some other leverage over parents in the past, frommy perspective, parents have put more emphasis on their children’s eduation.
For one thing, technological procession have brought a varitety of potential influence on our daily life, which makes the work of improving children’s study more convinient and efficient and makes parents more actively related in. With an advanced electronic device in our hand, the assignment complitment, the grade of recent examinations as well as the advices of teachers could be feedbacked efficiently and quickly. Taking the school where my parents worked in as an example. Taking the advantages of smart mobile phones, the communication between parents and teachers are much more frenquently than before. In this respect, parents could rapidly adjust their instruction to their children, and they can cooperate with teachers to implement a more specific guidance for every student.
For another thing, parents nowadays are more influnced by the conciousness that education is the most essential issue durning the growth process of their children. In modern society, the flourish of off-school classes reveal that the parents attach more importance on their children’s study. According to a survey conducted by Renminnet, one of the most authorized media in China, more than 50 percent of respondents, the teenagers in high school, implie that they have at least 2 hours additional class after school. Therefore, students nowadays are under more pressure from their parents.
Additionally, parents in modern society have some leverages than their parents such like more knowledge, more open-minded strategy in terms of dealing with problems in the growth process, as well as more intimidate parenthoods. All of these advantages promises that parents are more wise in the education and supposed to do more sound decisions when faced with some hard time went through by their children. They are more likely to listen to their children’s opinion, and percieve the irregular motion of the teenagers. To some extent, the can solve and arrange the difficulties together rather than leaving them exposed to the difficulties alone, like some parents in the past usually do.
In a nutshell, children nowadays recieved more attention form their parents both on the knowledge and in mentally, and the relationship between two decadescould be regarded as much improved than before. Any way, everyone has own opinion, I hope that they may somehow compromise after exposed to this article.
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